My main impression from reading your scenes prior to their deletion is that you write dialogue very rhythmically, with a very staccato cadence, more akin to Mamet than PTA, in my opinion. There's a lot of kinetic energy to the scenes. It's fun to read, and I imagine it would be fun for actors to perform.
My one real critique would be to examine the intentionality behind the speech patterns. Your characters tend to speak very elliptically to each other, which I enjoy, but they all seem to speak the same way all the time. They're just kind of dancing around each other with their words. Be clear in your mind as you're writing: why is each character saying what they're saying in that moment, why are they saying it in the specific way that they are, and also why are they NOT saying something different in a different way. Every line of dialogue that a character speaks needs to have an intention behind it beyond the revealing of information inherent in the words themselves. When a character says exactly what they mean, there should be a specific reason why. When they dance around the answer to a question, there should be a specific reason why. When they make an accusation, or tell a lie, or don't say anything at all, there should be a specific reason why, and that reason is always found in the answer to the question you have to know as a writer, which is what is this character's goal in this scene and in this moment. Once you know the answer to that question, everything they say and how they say it serves the purpose of revealing character, which is the single most important element of storytelling.
