thanks for giving it a read. i really appreciate it.
i donít know if i really see the pulp fiction-ness of it, i mean, aside from the structure, which is a bit similar. i think itís completely different in tone. but then again, i could just not be seeing it.
now, one of your main critiques/criticisms, if i understand you correctly, was that the characters, at times, talk about what is seen on screen. i think that a great deal of the time people ďtalk about what they see.Ē the scene you describe in pulp fiction is a wonderful scene, but itís not something i would ever write. it could be one of my downfalls as a writer (and iím very hesitant to call myself that) but i didnít set out to write something like that.
i agree with you that, classically, a story starts with the interruption of the ordinary, but i donít think that always needs to be the case. one of my goals with this script was to show the ordinary.
you are right about anglich. he needs more flesh to him. iím going to have to give his character a lot of thought before i attempt a rewrite.
the marquee or movie poster in the background is a great idea.
so thanks again for taking the time to read it, and taking the time to leave you thoughts.