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« Reply #15 on: July 09, 2003, 12:19:11 PM »
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Hey, I was the one who found that address first! I posted it Sunday under "pdl scriptbook". :evil:


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« Reply #16 on: July 09, 2003, 12:51:55 PM »
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« Reply #17 on: July 16, 2003, 01:58:46 PM »
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I was just reading the PDL script online and I'm realizing again how brilliantly written it is, how true to life it is.  I highly suggest anyone who wants to write their own script read this one because it's just perfect.

One of the things I noticed was how much stuff was cut from it.  The instances of Barry waking up in different clothes that he went to sleep in: does anyone know what was up with this part?  Its meaning, or why it was cut?  Also, all of Barry's reactions to young children and babies: they're both just perfect.

Too many movies make a beeline from one point to another, but this one knows what life is like, and takes delight in looking at all the little things, through this wounded puppy Barry who sees things with a child's eyes.  Who sees how beautiful a baby is and starts to cry, who just wants someone to love, just like Donnie Smith in Magnolia.

Also, there are some things that were added to the script that made the film even better.  For example, the restaurant host's line "I'm gonna crack your fucking skull."  And how Barry says "Can I show you something please?"  The addition of the word "please" makes that line even greater because of the delivery Sandler gives, and the inherent politeness of it.

I think the reason this resonates with me so much is this is how I see things too.  In my writing, I try to incorporate the "little things" because they seem to stick out more for me, and they mean more.  I kind of cringe when all the critics of the movie miss this kind of thing (the subtleties that they're supposed to be trained to catch), because there is an unassuming insight behind all of it; that someone can perfectly touch on all these intangible things, these feelings, emotions, and facts of life, with all these simple lines of dialogue or small scenes.  Some great examples of this.

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BARRY
            I get really sick of myself sometimes.

This line was cut, probably because something similar was left in the movie.  Barry says this to Lance, matter-of-factly, after going to one of many Smart And Final stores.  It's perfect, though, and would've have served a purpose quite well had it been left in, of all the bitterness and self-loathing people have who are victims of some sort of abuse, or are simply too hard on themselves.

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INT. PLANE - IN FLIGHT - LATER

Barry sits. BEAT. HOLD. We hear the sound of a BABY CRYING.
He looks across the aisle and sees:

A small, THREE YEAR OLD CHILD crying, behind held by its
FATHER. The baby stops crying for a moment, calming down,
breathing heavy, looks around with wide eyes.

CU. BARRY.

HE WELLS WITH TEARS AND A SMILE, CRINGES IN HIS FACE AND WE
SEE THE BUILD UP OF EMOTION, HIS VEINS POP FROM HIS FACE AND
THEN HE SMILES LIKE CRAZY, SMILING AND SMILING AND SMILING,
BRIGHT RED AND PAINFUL.

The baby line I mentioned before.  Just a perfect scene characterizing Barry even more.  I think since Barry only cried on screen once, people laughed at it more.  I don't know if Sandler is capable of doing a real dramatic cry, and perhaps that's why he wasn't shown expressing this emotion more.  It would've been nice, though.

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INT. ROYAL HAWAIIAN HOTEL ROOM - MOMENTS LATER

They're in bed making out with their clothes on and a light
on....they hold a second....

                         BARRY
            Do you wanna have sex?

                         LENA
            Yeah.

They take their shirts off.

                         LENA
            Press together. It feels good.

She cups his face with her hands and tenses;

                         LENA
            Oh my god, you are so adorable. I
            just....god dammit.

                         BARRY
            What's that? What is that that
            you're doing?

                         LENA
            I just...your face is so adorable
            and your cheek and your skin, I
            wanna bite it....I wanna bite your
            cheek and chew on it....god damn
            cute....fuck....

                         BARRY
            I know what you mean, I know what
            you mean, I get this feeling --

                         LENA
            ...what...?

                         BARRY
            IIIIIIIIIII don't want to hurt
            anything ever, but what I'm talking
            about is -- have you ever held a
            little puppy or a little kitten and
            it's just the cutest, softest, most
            precious thing in the world and out
            of the blue you get this feeling in
            your gut and all you wanna do is
            squeeze it. Just fuckin squeeze the
            shit out of it. To take a little
            puppy and smash its skull...just so
            precious, so beautiful. Just so god
            damn wonderful and cute you wanna
            smack it and kick it and love it.
            Fuck. I don't know. I don't know.
            And you, you.....I'm looking at you
            and I just....your face is so
            beautiful I just wanna smash it,
            just smash it with a sledgehammer
            and squeeze it...you're so pretty.

They kiss and kiss and kiss;

                         LENA
            I know. I know. I know. I just
            wanna chew your face and scoop out
            your beautiful, beautiful eyes with
            an ice cream scooper and eat 'em
            and chew 'em and suck on 'em. Fuck.

                         BARRY
            This is funny.

                         LENA
            Yeah.

                         BARRY
            This is nice.

Part of this was cut out, some was left in.  I think the beginning of the scene added even more tenderness and innocence and vulnerability to it, because rarely if ever do you see a guy ask a girl if she wants to have sex.  Usually there's the requisite pawing and groping, and it just happens.  But the asking, and then the action and dialogue that follows just gives the scene even more power.  Shame it was cut.

And, well, Barry's spiel about seeing something so beautiful he wants to smash it, well, it's just amazing.  Can't explain why.  It's something you either get or you don't.  And it really doesn't get any more perfect than that.

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« Reply #18 on: July 16, 2003, 05:13:39 PM »
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I'm glad the extra "making out" lines are out.  It would be taken the wrong way a lot more than the right.  It woudl be funny, and it's supposed to be, but too much detractong from what's really happening.
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« Reply #19 on: July 16, 2003, 09:47:37 PM »
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SHOOTING SCRIPT (PINK REVISED) 06/20/01

SCENE XX (ADDITIONAL SCENE)

Barry and Lena on the street, CAMERA is behind them.
This is dawn or dusk.....they are sitting as if on a
park bench.....she turns to him, and then:

TRUCK DRIVES PAST going the opposite direction.
"We're all one thing, Lieutenant. That's what I've come to realize. Like cells in a body. 'Cept we can't see the body. The way fish can't see the ocean. And so we envy each other. Hurt each other. Hate each other. How silly is that? A heart cell hating a lung cell"

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« Reply #20 on: July 16, 2003, 10:28:22 PM »
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BARRY
Do you wanna have sex?

Man that would've been weird seeing Barry say that!
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« Reply #21 on: July 16, 2003, 10:38:36 PM »
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one of my favorite lines was a bit different in the script.  "i believe this is a small piano".  in the script it was "i don't know.  I think it's a piano...a small piano".


the way it is in the movie is much better: the delivery, the length and simplcity,  just perfect.

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« Reply #22 on: July 16, 2003, 10:41:09 PM »
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one of my favorite lines was a bit different in the script.  "i believe this is a small piano".  in the script it was "i don't know.  I think it's a piano...a small piano".


the way it is in the movie is much better: the delivery, the length and simplcity,  just perfect.


Actually it was "I beleive this is THE small piano" Even better.

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« Reply #23 on: July 16, 2003, 10:51:13 PM »
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one of my favorite lines was a bit different in the script.  "i believe this is a small piano".  in the script it was "i don't know.  I think it's a piano...a small piano".


the way it is in the movie is much better: the delivery, the length and simplcity,  just perfect.


Actually it was "I beleive this is THE small piano" Even better.


was it?  interesting........

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« Reply #24 on: July 16, 2003, 10:59:57 PM »
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one of my favorite lines was a bit different in the script.  "i believe this is a small piano".  in the script it was "i don't know.  I think it's a piano...a small piano".


the way it is in the movie is much better: the delivery, the length and simplcity,  just perfect.


Actually it was "I beleive this is THE small piano" Even better.


was it?  interesting........


No.. it wasn't...

It is "I believe this is a small piano"
"We're all one thing, Lieutenant. That's what I've come to realize. Like cells in a body. 'Cept we can't see the body. The way fish can't see the ocean. And so we envy each other. Hurt each other. Hate each other. How silly is that? A heart cell hating a lung cell"

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« Reply #25 on: July 16, 2003, 11:04:49 PM »
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HA!  i knew it.....

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« Reply #26 on: July 16, 2003, 11:41:00 PM »
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one of my favorite lines was a bit different in the script.  "i believe this is a small piano".  in the script it was "i don't know.  I think it's a piano...a small piano".


the way it is in the movie is much better: the delivery, the length and simplcity,  just perfect.


Actually it was "I beleive this is THE small piano" Even better.


was it?  interesting........


No.. it wasn't...

It is "I believe this is a small piano"


Are you sure? I could have swarn I heard "the".

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« Reply #27 on: July 16, 2003, 11:44:26 PM »
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one of my favorite lines was a bit different in the script.  "i believe this is a small piano".  in the script it was "i don't know.  I think it's a piano...a small piano".


the way it is in the movie is much better: the delivery, the length and simplcity,  just perfect.


Actually it was "I beleive this is THE small piano" Even better.


was it?  interesting........


No.. it wasn't...

It is "I believe this is a small piano"


Are you sure? I could have swarn I heard "the".


yes.. i am sure.. i double checked the movie.. it is.
"We're all one thing, Lieutenant. That's what I've come to realize. Like cells in a body. 'Cept we can't see the body. The way fish can't see the ocean. And so we envy each other. Hurt each other. Hate each other. How silly is that? A heart cell hating a lung cell"

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« Reply #28 on: July 16, 2003, 11:46:47 PM »
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one of my favorite lines was a bit different in the script.  "i believe this is a small piano".  in the script it was "i don't know.  I think it's a piano...a small piano".


the way it is in the movie is much better: the delivery, the length and simplcity,  just perfect.


Actually it was "I beleive this is THE small piano" Even better.


was it?  interesting........


No.. it wasn't...

It is "I believe this is a small piano"


Are you sure? I could have swarn I heard "the".


yes.. i am sure.. i double checked the movie.. it is.


I just double checked as well. It's weird cause to me it still sounds like "THE". Your probably right though. Nevermind.

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« Reply #29 on: July 17, 2003, 01:03:19 AM »
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dear God..
endless 'nothing is what it seems'-isms

 

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