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Two New Scripts
budgie:
I'd rather go intimate than epic. But I'm tempted by your challenge, sphinxie. I could do it with a cast of two and a pound of flesh.
sphinx:
okay: you can either choose to adapt it as an epic or choose a period of time/event.
Xixax:
FWIW, Jake's scripts were a fun read.
budgie:
--- Quote from: sphinx ---okay: you can either choose to adapt it as an epic or choose a period of time/event.
--- End quote ---
No, no, no. The way I see it there is no either/or. It's about perspective. 'Epic' has certain connotations that I don't see necessarily reflected.
Add a knob of lard and I'm sizzling.
Yeah, sorry Jake. I've read the first one and have some comments, but I haven't got around to the second one yet. I wish you'd posted them here so they were unavoidable.
Jake_82:
--- Quote from: budgie ---I wish you'd posted them here so they were unavoidable.
--- End quote ---
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INT. LIVING ROOM - DAY
Tim sits in a chair, staring off blankly.
CUT TO:
INT. KITCHEN - MOMENTS LATER
Tim opens the fridge to find hardly anything there. He
stands looking at the fridge for a mintute.
CUT TO:
INT. KINKO'S - LATER
A photocopier makes copies, while Tim stands by idly.
CUT TO:
EXT. STREET - DAY
Tim puts up advertisements for computer repair on telephone
posts, etc.
CUT TO:
INT. TIM'S HOUSE - LATER
Tim opens the door to his house, walks in, closes it behind
him.
CUT TO:
INT. LIVING ROOM - MOMENTS LATER
Tim sits in chair, staring off blankly, almost the same as
the first shot. The phone rings once. We cut to a shot of
Tim holding the phone
TIM
Hello?
INT. UNKNOWN ROOM - SIMULTANEOUSLY
ECU of a woman speaking into the reciever.
WOMAN
I need computer repair.
CUT TO:
2.
EXT. WOMAN'S HOUSE - DAY
Establishing shot of the outside of the house from the
street. ECU of Tim pressing the doorbell. The door
immediately and quickly swings open.
WOMAN
(loudly and quickly,
without any pauses)
Hi My Computer's Broken And It's
Not Working And I Need You To Fix
It Cause Your Ad Said You Could.
Beat.
TIM
Okay.
CUT TO:
INT. WOMAN'S HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
Several shots of random things in her house, a stopped
clock, bizarre photographs on the walls, etc.
Tim follows her through the living room and down a hallway
and she goes into the bathroom, closing the door behind her.
Tim stands there, confused for a minute. He silently
debates knocking on the door and we hear water running, a
toilet flushing.
The woman comes out of the bathroom and looks at Tim, puzzled.
WOMAN
What are you doing here?
Tim tries to come up with an answer
TIM
uh... you mean, uh,--
WOMAN
Why aren't you fixing my computer?
TIM
You didn't tell me where it was
WOMAN
It's In The Garage Where Else Would
It Be?
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3.
INT. GARAGE - MOMENTS LATER
In the middle of the garage there is a table with a computer
and monitor on it and nothing else around it.
Tim tries turning on the computer, nothing happens. He
looks around the back for a minute, thinking.
WOMAN
See What I Mean, It's Like I Said,
It Just Doesn't Work.
Beat. Tim opens the case of the computer, looks in for a
second. He closes it and looks up at her.
TIM
There's nothing in this case.
WOMAN
What Do You Mean I Bought This At
CompUSA! There Must Be Some
Mistake, Maybe It's Supposed To Be
That Way.
TIM
Ummm--
WOMAN
Maybe I Got A Virus Because My
Friend Cassie Said Windows 97 Has
Lots of Viruses and Matt Said This
Computer Has Windows 97 So Maybe
That's What's Wrong.
TIM
I'm prettty sure there's supposed
to be some hardware components
inside the computer... Did you ever
take it in for repair or something,
or maybe one of your friends was
working on it and removed some parts?
WOMAN
(strongly)
I don't know what you're talking
about because if anyone could have
stolen my parts it was probably you
because no one else has even open
this thing and I sure as hell
didn't! I'm CALLING Cassie.
TIM
Uh-
4.
WOMAN
(on cell phone)
Cassie GET OVER HERE RIGHT NOW I
hired some hotshot kid to see what
the hell was wrong with my computer
and I think he took the parts our
or something to screw it up because
it was working FINE until he came
along so get over her right now.
(pause)
No, I haven't called the police.
(pause)
No.
(pause)
I know! Just get over here.
TIM
Ma'am--
WOMAN
Don't Take That Tone With Me!
Cassie enters the garage.
WOMAN
Cassie, Thank God!
CASSIE
What seems to be the problem?
WOMAN
This guy thinks someone stole the
parts of my computer!
CASSIE
(glaring at Tim)
They appear to be all here.
TIM
No, on the inside--
Cassie rips open the side of the computer and looks inside
CASSIE
(all one sentance)
Yeah he's not fibbing there's
nothing in here I guess someone
stole this crap
(to Tim)
was it you?
The first Woman is sobbing hysterically and pacing around
the garage. She's glaring at him and walks towards him
backing him into the computer
5.
TIM
What? No! I only just got here, I
don't know what's going on, I
didn't do anything. I'm just trying
to repair--
He wlaks into the table and nudges the computer case,
catches it. The two women audibly gasp.
WOMAN
What are you DOING?! I thought you
were a computer SPECIALIST!
CASSIE
I would call the police.
WOMAN
That's what I'm going to do!
TIM
No, ladies this is just a big
misunderstanding
WOMAN
I'm Having An Emergency At 295
Jackson Lane, There Is A BURGLAR IN
MY HOUSE!
Tim runs back into the house, still holding the case.
WOMAN
Stop That Man!
Cassie runs after him and chases him through the hallway and
slams into him. He pushes backwards and she falls to the
ground, screeching at him. He leaves the house and starts
running down the street with the computer. She stands in the
doorway of the house. Quick Zoom in on her angered face.
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EXT. STREET - LATER
Tim is walking down the street, still with the computer
case in his arms, exhausted. He throws down the case and
keeps walking.
CUT TO:
INT. LIVING ROOM - LATER
Tim sits in a chair, staring off blankly.
CUT TO BLACK.
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