need 98 pages to read?

[bluejaytwist]

i have my script up on triggerstreet - and i get either:

a) glowing, 'best thing ever' reviews
b) horrid, biggest piece of shit ever


anyways, should anyone want to comment, id be interested in your thoughts/comments

the script is with movie central at the moment, waiting review.
katherine isabelle is/was attached. its going to take some time to get funding (old board members rolling their eyes at the site of this script i assume - its been a loooooooooooooong fucking time)

but:

www.fortyfps.com/magnesium.pdf

[xerxes]

did it ever get made in its short form???

[bluejaytwist]

parts of it did.
we shot brendan fletcher (dylans) parts
and we were to shoot trista's parts but my actress friend's mother got very sick and she had to take 6 months off from the world...so in that time - i wrote it out feature length....

[xerxes]

overall i liked it quite a bit. your characters are distinct, interesting and well developed people.  and there's obviously a lot going on with them.

the only real problem i came across (and i can't even be sure it's a problem, as i've only read it once and therefore do not fully have a grasp on it) was the pacing. as it got towards the end it felt a bit rushed (although that may have been what you were going for), especially in the scenes with trista and louis at the restaurant.  the scene just felt a little odd to me. it could be just me though.

on a smaller note, louis' character seem like somewhat of a loser, and i questioned why two people would seemed to be so taken by him.

i don't know if any of this really makes sense, i never been very good at criticism and the like, but i gave it a shot.

could you give me a little more information on what you planned to do with the whole color scheme thing, it sounded quite interesting. anyway i hope you get it made. good luck with it.

[bluejaytwist]

the marketing package/copy i sent out with the script read as follows:

red, yellow and blue are primary.
yellow and blue make green.
green is the opposite of red.
but on one frantic tuesday,
a revealation will make things
very black and white

dylan, a security salesman who lacks security, is working on alison; alison, a cosmetic embalmer, uses bottles of wine to cope with her problems; trista, her mother & celebrity romance novelist is anxiously awaiting her boyfriend - louis, a thrift store owner/tomato-can boxer - to ask for her hand in marriage

a secret exists inside this circle in a story about the lack of security in relationships, family ties and fragile situations.

magnesium offers a unique outlook on life, woven through a chaotic day-in-the-life of four people who's life can twist and turn in any given direction.

it is a personal exploration of the hidden elements of crisis.
it is about trying to keep it all together, while watching it all fall apart.

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but the above bit about the colors was the point of my response/your question, so -- does that help?? (especially when you connect the characters stories with their color and read that top bit??)

[xerxes]

i was thinking about putting my script up on triggerstreet, but i was wondering, do you get any useful feedback??? because most of the reveiws i've read there are not great.

d'you have a link to yours???