If anyone's interested, the script is available online now.
http://www.dailyscript.com/scripts/Punch-Drunk_Love.html
I don't have the book so I don't know whether this is the same draft or not but nonetheless, there it is.
Interesting...I just skimmed a few random bits...small differences of course.
i thought it was sposed to end with an 18-wheeler driving by and blowing dust everywhere.
that's not on this script.. so either this isn't the shooting script, or it wasn't scripted like the speech jim gives over Save Me.
Quote from: Pi thought it was sposed to end with an 18-wheeler driving by and blowing dust everywhere.
that's not on this script.. so either this isn't the shooting script, or it wasn't scripted like the speech jim gives over Save Me.
No, it is the shooting script, but whoever transcribed it, didn't include that last page.
Quote from: MacGuffinNo, it is the shooting script, but whoever transcribed it, didn't include that last page.
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what brave adonis, cadillac of men, will supply us with the final page transcript!?(https://xixax.com/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fspringfield-shopper.de%2FSpecial%2F13%2Fscreens%2Fdabf05%2FPDVD_137.jpg&hash=c7391520b47795ab811596b5c34ee4fca1771cc5)
I'm glad I can now read the script... i'm too much of a cheap-ass to buy it for $25...
Nick
Quote from: TheVoiceOfNickI'm glad I can now read the script... i'm too much of a cheap-ass to buy it for $25...
Nick
With this special deal (in conjunction with C&C), you can get it for cheaper than that:
http://www.newmarketpress.com/ptafan.asp
That way you won't have to pirate PT's stuff on his own freaking message board.
"I love PTA so much... Here is a free link to his blood sweat and tears."
Quote from: Amanda HugginkissThat way you won't have to pirate PT's stuff on his own freaking message board.
"I love PTA so much... Here is a free link to his blood sweat and tears."
I feel his pain as an artist... its not fun when someone takes your work. oooh... New Market Press... hrm... At 50% off I may even get the hardcover!
Nick
Quote from: Amanda HugginkissThat way you won't have to pirate PT's stuff on his own freaking message board.
"I love PTA so much... Here is a free link to his blood sweat and tears."
Oh, fuck off. This isn't mp3 file sharing. Pirating would be downloading his movies so don't give us this about stealing his work just because the fucking shooting script is now available online.
Fuck who? Fuck me? Fuck you, disco stu! Even your handle is a rip-off, jack-off. The Simpsons would say your game is a shame to the name.
Don't give me your primate definition of piracy. Support your favorite artists and PAY for their hard work.
Caaaaaaaaaulk sucker.
I must say, if PTA's scripts weren't published and for sale, then i'd say its ok to post them online and share it... since he wouldn't be making money on it anyways... he makes his money on the movies themselves, as well as the soundtracks. But since he's actually trying to make a buck by selling the scripts in stores, its fair to say that its not entirely fair for him if you download it... Is Hard Eight's script for sale? If not, I wouldn't mind reading it online... if he decides one day to sell a script of it, i'd go out and buy it... if it weren't too expensive! :wink:
Nick
Hey, I was the one who found that address first! I posted it Sunday under "pdl scriptbook". :evil:
sorry...but the PDL script book is kinda garbage...(imo)....sure neat little thing to have, but if I woulda realized it didn't have any production photos, interviews, or just rambling from PT....I woulda just print the one offline (and not felt bad about it either)....although, that New Market deal is worth it....shit, I shoulda waited....too late, too late.
I just printed the script off the internet because I heard the book had just the script itself. 8)
Quote from: filmcriticHey, I was the one who found that address first! I posted it Sunday under "pdl scriptbook". :evil:
But this is the 'official' thread.
Whatever. :roll:
I was just reading the PDL script online and I'm realizing again how brilliantly written it is, how true to life it is. I highly suggest anyone who wants to write their own script read this one because it's just perfect.
One of the things I noticed was how much stuff was cut from it. The instances of Barry waking up in different clothes that he went to sleep in: does anyone know what was up with this part? Its meaning, or why it was cut? Also, all of Barry's reactions to young children and babies: they're both just perfect.
Too many movies make a beeline from one point to another, but this one knows what life is like, and takes delight in looking at all the little things, through this wounded puppy Barry who sees things with a child's eyes. Who sees how beautiful a baby is and starts to cry, who just wants someone to love, just like Donnie Smith in Magnolia.
Also, there are some things that were added to the script that made the film even better. For example, the restaurant host's line "I'm gonna crack your fucking skull." And how Barry says "Can I show you something
please?" The addition of the word "please" makes that line even greater because of the delivery Sandler gives, and the inherent politeness of it.
I think the reason this resonates with me so much is this is how I see things too. In my writing, I try to incorporate the "little things" because they seem to stick out more for me, and they mean more. I kind of cringe when all the critics of the movie miss this kind of thing (the subtleties that they're supposed to be trained to catch), because there is an unassuming insight behind all of it; that someone can perfectly touch on all these intangible things, these feelings, emotions, and facts of life, with all these simple lines of dialogue or small scenes. Some great examples of this.
QuoteBARRY
I get really sick of myself sometimes.
This line was cut, probably because something similar was left in the movie. Barry says this to Lance, matter-of-factly, after going to one of many Smart And Final stores. It's perfect, though, and would've have served a purpose quite well had it been left in, of all the bitterness and self-loathing people have who are victims of some sort of abuse, or are simply too hard on themselves.
QuoteINT. PLANE - IN FLIGHT - LATER
Barry sits. BEAT. HOLD. We hear the sound of a BABY CRYING.
He looks across the aisle and sees:
A small, THREE YEAR OLD CHILD crying, behind held by its
FATHER. The baby stops crying for a moment, calming down,
breathing heavy, looks around with wide eyes.
CU. BARRY.
HE WELLS WITH TEARS AND A SMILE, CRINGES IN HIS FACE AND WE
SEE THE BUILD UP OF EMOTION, HIS VEINS POP FROM HIS FACE AND
THEN HE SMILES LIKE CRAZY, SMILING AND SMILING AND SMILING,
BRIGHT RED AND PAINFUL.
The baby line I mentioned before. Just a perfect scene characterizing Barry even more. I think since Barry only cried on screen once, people laughed at it more. I don't know if Sandler is capable of doing a real dramatic cry, and perhaps that's why he wasn't shown expressing this emotion more. It would've been nice, though.
QuoteINT. ROYAL HAWAIIAN HOTEL ROOM - MOMENTS LATER
They're in bed making out with their clothes on and a light
on....they hold a second....
BARRY
Do you wanna have sex?
LENA
Yeah.
They take their shirts off.
LENA
Press together. It feels good.
She cups his face with her hands and tenses;
LENA
Oh my god, you are so adorable. I
just....god dammit.
BARRY
What's that? What is that that
you're doing?
LENA
I just...your face is so adorable
and your cheek and your skin, I
wanna bite it....I wanna bite your
cheek and chew on it....god damn
cute....fuck....
BARRY
I know what you mean, I know what
you mean, I get this feeling --
LENA
...what...?
BARRY
IIIIIIIIIII don't want to hurt
anything ever, but what I'm talking
about is -- have you ever held a
little puppy or a little kitten and
it's just the cutest, softest, most
precious thing in the world and out
of the blue you get this feeling in
your gut and all you wanna do is
squeeze it. Just fuckin squeeze the
shit out of it. To take a little
puppy and smash its skull...just so
precious, so beautiful. Just so god
damn wonderful and cute you wanna
smack it and kick it and love it.
Fuck. I don't know. I don't know.
And you, you.....I'm looking at you
and I just....your face is so
beautiful I just wanna smash it,
just smash it with a sledgehammer
and squeeze it...you're so pretty.
They kiss and kiss and kiss;
LENA
I know. I know. I know. I just
wanna chew your face and scoop out
your beautiful, beautiful eyes with
an ice cream scooper and eat 'em
and chew 'em and suck on 'em. Fuck.
BARRY
This is funny.
LENA
Yeah.
BARRY
This is nice.
Part of this was cut out, some was left in. I think the beginning of the scene added even more tenderness and innocence and vulnerability to it, because rarely if ever do you see a guy ask a girl if she wants to have sex. Usually there's the requisite pawing and groping, and it just happens. But the asking, and then the action and dialogue that follows just gives the scene even more power. Shame it was cut.
And, well, Barry's spiel about seeing something so beautiful he wants to smash it, well, it's just amazing. Can't explain why. It's something you either get or you don't. And it really doesn't get any more perfect than that.
I'm glad the extra "making out" lines are out. It would be taken the wrong way a lot more than the right. It woudl be funny, and it's supposed to be, but too much detractong from what's really happening.
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SHOOTING SCRIPT (PINK REVISED) 06/20/01
SCENE XX (ADDITIONAL SCENE)
Barry and Lena on the street, CAMERA is behind them.
This is dawn or dusk.....they are sitting as if on a
park bench.....she turns to him, and then:
TRUCK DRIVES PAST going the opposite direction.
BARRY
Do you wanna have sex?
Man that would've been weird seeing Barry say that!
one of my favorite lines was a bit different in the script. "i believe this is a small piano". in the script it was "i don't know. I think it's a piano...a small piano".
the way it is in the movie is much better: the delivery, the length and simplcity, just perfect.
Quote from: ewardone of my favorite lines was a bit different in the script. "i believe this is a small piano". in the script it was "i don't know. I think it's a piano...a small piano".
the way it is in the movie is much better: the delivery, the length and simplcity, just perfect.
Actually it was "I beleive this is THE small piano" Even better.
Quote from: Brock LandersQuote from: ewardone of my favorite lines was a bit different in the script. "i believe this is a small piano". in the script it was "i don't know. I think it's a piano...a small piano".
the way it is in the movie is much better: the delivery, the length and simplcity, just perfect.
Actually it was "I beleive this is THE small piano" Even better.
was it? interesting........
Quote from: ewardQuote from: Brock LandersQuote from: ewardone of my favorite lines was a bit different in the script. "i believe this is a small piano". in the script it was "i don't know. I think it's a piano...a small piano".
the way it is in the movie is much better: the delivery, the length and simplcity, just perfect.
Actually it was "I beleive this is THE small piano" Even better.
was it? interesting........
No.. it wasn't...
It is
"I believe this is a small piano"
HA! i knew it.....
Quote from: 82Quote from: ewardQuote from: Brock LandersQuote from: ewardone of my favorite lines was a bit different in the script. "i believe this is a small piano". in the script it was "i don't know. I think it's a piano...a small piano".
the way it is in the movie is much better: the delivery, the length and simplcity, just perfect.
Actually it was "I beleive this is THE small piano" Even better.
was it? interesting........
No.. it wasn't...
It is "I believe this is a small piano"
Are you sure? I could have swarn I heard "the".
Quote from: Brock LandersQuote from: 82Quote from: ewardQuote from: Brock LandersQuote from: ewardone of my favorite lines was a bit different in the script. "i believe this is a small piano". in the script it was "i don't know. I think it's a piano...a small piano".
the way it is in the movie is much better: the delivery, the length and simplcity, just perfect.
Actually it was "I beleive this is THE small piano" Even better.
was it? interesting........
No.. it wasn't...
It is "I believe this is a small piano"
Are you sure? I could have swarn I heard "the".
yes.. i am sure.. i double checked the movie.. it is.
Quote from: 82Quote from: Brock LandersQuote from: 82Quote from: ewardQuote from: Brock LandersQuote from: ewardone of my favorite lines was a bit different in the script. "i believe this is a small piano". in the script it was "i don't know. I think it's a piano...a small piano".
the way it is in the movie is much better: the delivery, the length and simplcity, just perfect.
Actually it was "I beleive this is THE small piano" Even better.
was it? interesting........
No.. it wasn't...
It is "I believe this is a small piano"
Are you sure? I could have swarn I heard "the".
yes.. i am sure.. i double checked the movie.. it is.
I just double checked as well. It's weird cause to me it still sounds like "THE". Your probably right though. Nevermind.
dear God..
also if you guys want to "see" the "SCENE XX (ADDITIONAL SCENE)"
look no further than the picture of when you first open your dvd case.
THE small piano?
A small piano?
Hm. I think, if you own this, this is one of those DVD's with the option that lets subtitles play with the movie!
WOWZERS, SCOOB!!
PS it is A small piano
that's enough.